EPIC!
So he has a magic Glock and a Jesus sword? That is epic!
EPIC!
So he has a magic Glock and a Jesus sword? That is epic!
Eh?...
Um... Maybe it's becuase I generally don't with any anime, but I had almost no clue what was going on. Something about mages and killing each other I think. I don't know why the guy with the axe was there... he doesn't seem very magey. Also, not to be rude, but I hope that dialoge was supposed to be horrendous English. It wasn't old English either (just in case that's what you were going for).
You could try some sound effects, a plot line, and real human voices. Also, blood doesn't make everything look cool. Strategic placement.