I'm not going to fault you for the begining, only because I know exactly how diffcult and annoying those are. The choice of instruments worked out well, but the whole thing nees more energy. Put more instruments into the beat - blood overdrive that thing. Heck, blood overdrive the whole thing! Change the melody up every 3rd run through or so. You are on the right track, just don't be afraid to throw things in there.
thanx i'll be sure to keep that in mind on the next one
When I was listening to this song I could just see it being the background music to a transition scene in an action movie. It's hardcore and dark, but not so much that it actualy tries to be a song on its own. Very much background music. It would have been great as a loop, and it ended kinda' suddenly, but not bad at all.
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